Love me always - Progressing

[Slyith]

Love me always

The first time I set my eyes upon you,
I knew that one day I'd be saying I DO.

I was so nervous in asking you out,
I thought I would've fainted before you answered because i had a feeling of doubt.

The moment I heard the words "yes" out of your beautiful voice,
I knew my life would be forever in rejoice.

No matter what the obstacle is, we'll pull it through together,

[The Zaven]

Hey I'm not trying to be a meany :(, I like the literature but to have connecting rhyme lines is just bugging me. 7.9/10

[Slyith]

lol, well it sounds better that way

[altec bank]

hm nice.. :D

[Divine]

i LIKE it, but make sure there is the same or close amount of scymbols in each line or each it doesn't flow properly;]

[vradah]

damn, im gonna use that as my pick-up line for homecoming :D

[Slyith]

yeah i know...making really really good romantic poems are a bit harder than just easy ones to rhyme, and the short poems with like 3-5 words per sentence is pretty easy to use.