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Perf
10-22-2008, 10:11 PM
well, in english class, we were assigned an assignment to right a horror story.
well, i have been working on this for days, and it is complete.


The black soul weeping within comes forth to eat and torture the body while the inter self dies.
By: Aaron North

My name is Damien Sign, I am 34 years old, and I am Ill. I have a different state of mine, and love to torture people. Enjoy my story.

It all started on March 15, when I was in town looking for my next victim. The high school was just getting out, when I noticed Marry Sither. Right then and there I knew she was my next victim.

I went back to the house, and got on my computer to search for information I needed. After hours of searching on websites, I got all the information I needed to stalk her. I thought about her a lot, and what I was going to do to her. My mind was racing with excitement.

March 23, I have started to stalk, and photograph Marry. I am excited to meet Marry, and torture her. She is very joyful and happy, she is going to be a screamer. The screamers are always more fun, because there so afraid.

March 26, I found out today that Marry has a boyfriend, his name is Jay Simmons. Jay is one of those popular rich kids. You know the guy that all the girls dream about? Well yeah I dream about him to, but I dream about killing him.

March 29, It is time to get rid of Jay. He and Marry are going to the movies tonight, and I shall surprise him after he drops Marry off. I greeted Jay at his car, punched him in the back of the head to knock him out. Then I dragged his body to my car, where I drove him to my house to chain him up.

Later that night, I made small incisions into Jay’s legs, arms, and back. Jay screamed, and screamed but no one would hear him. Since we were in my sound proof basement. After that, I castrated him of his ***** and testicles, then stored them in a jar. So he wouldn’t try to fight, I broke his legs and arms, with a hammer. I carried his body to a meat grinder, and threw him in. I then toke my shovel, and scooped up his guts, and put them in a bucket.

April 2, today is the day I kidnap Marry and torture her. I have some things I must do, but I shall have her in the evening. Later that night I met Marry in the park, put a sack over her head, and toke her back to the house.

When we got to the house I tied marry to a chair, and fed her Jay’s guts. I made her eat it, because she wasn’t going to be eating for awhile. After her dinner, I strapped he up in the basement, where she will stay.

April 4, Marry is still alive, but is barley living with 100 cuts in her body. I am getting bored with Marry, so I will have dinner with her before I kill her. And there we sat, eating an amazing dinner, steak, corn. And biscuits. After the romantic, and yummy dinner I cut off Marry’s head and carver my name in to her stomach “D-cannibal”. After that I dug out her eyes, bit off her ears, and scalped her.

Now that Marry was ready, I displayed her on her porch, just for her parents to see. The display contained head stood up, her body laid across in front, and a jar with her eyes, and ears next to the head. I hope her parents like it, I worked very hard on her. Marry was a favorite of mine, and she was very beautiful, hopefully she is in peace.

I don’t think I am crazy, I just have a different interest in what I like to do with people. Everyone is different, so why am I wrong. I am not wrong, I am me, and you can’t punish me for being me.

- D-Cannibal




maybe i can get literary art rank? =]

Perf
10-22-2008, 10:12 PM
You May Now Post.

Perf
10-23-2008, 06:58 AM
wow, there is 16 views, and no posts, sad...
post people! read it!

slipknot ftw
10-23-2008, 07:05 AM
It's great, just fix those spelling mistakes, and your teacher will be happy (I think.) :)

Dangt351
10-23-2008, 07:06 AM
Nice story dude, Your paragraphs are really short though.

Don't triple post.

Can a forum/Global mod please merge his posts?

~Dangt351

Italy68
10-23-2008, 07:08 AM
Naiss story :)

Boylight
10-23-2008, 07:08 AM
Poor Jay.
This wasnt enough of pain.Add some more pain in it.:)
I love this.

ganthor321
10-23-2008, 07:08 AM
i kind of like it

Damien
10-23-2008, 07:27 AM
i luz it because my name is damein lmao...... 10/10

Divine
10-23-2008, 07:31 AM
AMG AMG AMG GOOOOOOOD STORY, ADDMORE PAIN THO. I like the ending where you put Marry at her parents doorstep. LMFAO, it's likeher dad comes home and then he sees her dead, and crashes into the garage. lololol

mercenary
10-23-2008, 02:41 PM
No, I don't sugar coat the truth (nor do I salt it - har har har har!!!11)

Lets be honest here, the story is rather unappealing and bland. Instead of skipping the whole Mary's personality, you should have rather given your characters opinion on Mary thus expanding our knowlege of your character AND creating another character which we understand and some of us will relate to, therefore making us more likely to read the rest of it.

One HUGE mistake you made was the opening sentence. You should have stayed in character rather than saying 'hey guise this is mai story!111'

The sole reason as to why the story wasn't a good one was because you rushed, nothing more and nothing less. Take more time on it and ALWAYS RE-READ!

Perf
10-23-2008, 03:08 PM
person above, and all.
i wrote the story because i had to, but it was a good topic to me, so i posted it.
yes it might have some mistakes, but im only in 8th grade.
and i'v been failing english/grammar for 4 years.
i just recently started learning the basics.. sad.

so yeah, im not gonna be good at righting an exspert story.

mercenary
10-23-2008, 03:09 PM
person above, and all.
i wrote the story because i had to, but it was a good topic to me, so i posted it.
yes it might have some mistakes, but im only in 8th grade.
and i'v been failing english/grammar for 4 years.
i just recently started learning the basics.. sad.

so yeah, im not gonna be good at righting an exspert story.

No one is asking you to write an expert story, but when you are asking for Literacy Artist you have to be above average.


maybe i can get literary art rank? =]

PureSkiller
10-23-2008, 03:11 PM
Nice story but don't triple post ..