A Poem By ~Freaken Str~

[Freaken Str]

A day in my life, is always an ordinary day,
Unless it is in the month of May.
Twas the greatest month of my life,
the sweetest thing, for you asked to be my wife.
These words, this phrase, this simple question,
does it make you wonder why you did mention?
And to this day, I think back to,
The very same day, I said yes to you. ;)

[Bob Dole]

This is good, but don't try to force the rhyme. If you can't freely make rhymes, stick to free verse, or haiku. You will find it to be much easier to write.

[The Zaven]

Honestly it's terrible..

[Bob Dole]

Honestly it's terrible..
That may be true, but you should at least give him some tips to help him improve it.

[Boylight]

Honestly it's terrible..

And u dont have to flood like 10 poems a day.
We all know u wanna be artist.

[619hit]

nice poem!

[Freaken Str]

Thanks for the tips. I know you guys want Highschool language and vocabulary, but I can do it. My teachers agree.

[Italy68]

Not bad

[K E W L]

Its alright. 7/10

[Qrat]

truely not bad ;] 8/10

[Divine]

AMGZ, like it'z cute, i liek it.

[Experienced]

Lol, nice Danh. I like the poem. Why didn't you tell me about it at school? :rolleyes:

Anyways, I like it ;)

~Chris

[O l l i e]

Poetry Sucks =)
It Would Be Good, If I Liked Poems.
0.001/10

-Ollie

[Freaken Str]

Lol, nice Danh. I like the poem. Why didn't you tell me about it at school? :rolleyes:

Anyways, I like it ;)

~Chris
Thanks for commenting Chris. It means alot. (We're best friends irl). I didn't tell you at school because this was done on the Friday (24th) when we had no school. (Night of the 23rd)