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The Zaven
10-23-2008, 11:53 PM
Rebelious, jealous
Have a set of thought

When was this life in course
An angel must have

But when
When will you notice
When will you cry
When will you gain sorrow and just, die?
When will you decide
Why won't you speak?
Why don't you have yourself a wonderful seek
Don't be encouraged
Don't be ashamed
Don't go around having this target aimed

Kelly, have this inside
Thought, written
Spoken into being < Stole from bible.

No I won't
I just don't
Please stop your worries
I have the sign

But when will you find it?
When will you shine?
Please tell me
When
Nottz
10-23-2008, 11:57 PM
Good work, but not your best. 7/10
619hit
10-23-2008, 11:59 PM
yup what he said ^^^ 8/10
Bob Dole
10-24-2008, 12:01 AM
This is really good. So you wrote it about a girl? I love all the repitition.
The Zaven
10-24-2008, 07:42 PM
This is really good. So you wrote it about a girl? I love all the repitition.

Thanks, Bob.
Jesse
10-24-2008, 07:45 PM
This is why I wish you never spammed and pissed off Noles; you have the capability to be one of the most respected people here but you made Noles mad :(
The Zaven
10-24-2008, 07:58 PM
This is why I wish you never spammed and pissed off Noles; you have the capability to be one of the most respected people here but you made Noles mad :(

Thanks Benz, it actually means alot to see one of the main set of people here at Dodian actually respected what I wrote.
chimera
10-25-2008, 04:29 PM
very nice one, try your best next time :P
PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:34 PM
Nice work Zaven. :)
muslimz
10-25-2008, 08:13 PM
lol i saw this on this site: http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/rebelious-jealous/ wow nice.... copycat
mercenary
10-26-2008, 05:57 AM
lol i saw this on this site: http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/rebelious-jealous/ wow nice.... copycat

And all the little scraps of respect I built up for you are now ruined you dumb lier, Zaven.



This is a forum to show off your skills to try out for Literary Artist. (Sorry for color)

Submissions is not any sort of contest, it is just to show off what you got for this rank.

Do not post in Submissions unless you are trying to get the Literary Artist rank.

Benz likes seperate work, so do not be in a rush to make short poems to show off. This rank takes time so don't go off and spam spam spam.

IF YOU COPY WORK ITS A PERMANENT BAN




Haha, as it looks now, you've dug yourself a nice hole, now; please be my guest jump into it!
Italy68
10-26-2008, 06:06 AM
lol i saw this on this site: http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/rebelious-jealous/ wow nice.... copycat
Rofl Zaven got owned.
K E W L
10-26-2008, 06:20 AM
Epic Fail :cool:
aharper
10-26-2008, 12:18 PM
and benz felt sorry for you... i bet he thinks you can burn in hell now. :p
ZavenQST
10-26-2008, 02:04 PM
Are You Serious????? I Made This Whole Damn Thing Myself, He Made That On The Website Just To Get Me Banned You ****ing Idiots.
i muslim i
10-26-2008, 02:46 PM
Are You Serious????? I Made This Whole Damn Thing Myself, He Made That On The Website Just To Get Me Banned You ****ing Idiots.

you are F0cking nub! i just search on google ur tittle and it came on a site there a other people who have posted it before you...
PureSkiller
10-26-2008, 02:48 PM
you are F0cking nub! i just search on google ur tittle and it came on a site there a other people who have posted it before you...

Sorry, U'll be banned 4 failing & trying to get a Literary artist banned. :)

ENJOY!
Stealth
10-26-2008, 02:48 PM
This is ripped..
Blub Klub
10-26-2008, 03:11 PM
I saw on poemhunter that that poem was new,therefore obviously Zaven isn't a ripper. I think muslimz should be unbanned. Did you consider the possibility that maybe he really did thing Zaven ripped? It would make me suspicious if I saw someone's poem on another site too,wouldn't you agree?
shadow8564
10-28-2008, 10:24 PM
eh, I think its zavens, but its still kinda suspicous :p
The Zaven
10-28-2008, 10:43 PM
I saw on poemhunter that that poem was new,therefore obviously Zaven isn't a ripper. I think muslimz should be unbanned. Did you consider the possibility that maybe he really did thing Zaven ripped? It would make me suspicious if I saw someone's poem on another site too,wouldn't you agree?

It's not copied in any way, I already discussed this with the staff. I made this myself, honest to god. So just because of one retards choice, I am now flamed with many disrespecting me.
Blub Klub
10-28-2008, 10:44 PM
Didn't say it was copied.
The Zaven
10-28-2008, 10:51 PM
Didn't say it was copied.

Muslimz did try to get me banned though, that is a truth. How could he not have known, what a stupid thought. The poem was posted on Poemhunter a day after I posted my poem, thus the day I was banned. The evidence shows that he did, so Blub Klub, stop acting like your some Go-Go-Gadget fag that thinks he can solve a mystery to everything. For the sad fact, your probably eleven and trying to stick up for people that don't know you so you can earn an extra ripped off friend.