This Feel #2

[Jarodx4]

My cold shivering legs,
Standing in this same spot,
I'm never going to move.
Because this feel,
this feel is fabulous,
the wind starts to howl,
but I'm never going to move.
The winds messing up my hair,
but thats okay,
because the feel,
the feel is worth it.

-END

[Slyith]

meh, honestly, it's not good at all...improve on the subjects and verbs you are using in each sentence..try rhyming each of the words at the sentences of each 2 stanzas...try using more EMOTIONALLY words in your stanzas

[Jarodx4]

ooohhh kk....

[Slyith]

Cause you can use soo much good words with "feel"...using very describing words, like why was the feeling so "fabulous", describe it more of why it feels so fabulous..in the middle of your poem, needs to describe more physically then softly when you end it

[muslimz]

i didnt like it realy 4/10

[The Zaven]

This uses no strong words, nor it is well worth reading. 2/10

[muslimz]

This uses no strong words, nor it is well worth reading. 2/10

as the noob said :D