Huge Storm!

[Jarodx4]

Lightning strikes below my bear feat,
The harrowing weather housing the sky.
Family's straying there tottering homes,
The sky filling with sorrow,
rain getting louder and more intense.
Just when will this storm be over?

Houses becoming more unstable,
no ones safe anymore.
weeping children,thinking the world is over,
It may well be,
if the storm keeps its game up.

People looking for a safe overlay,
but the devastation is way too high.
Four children sitting cautiously,
awaiting and looking for there parents,
but no were to be seen.

The storm starts to growl and howl,
The residents wonder if its over.
Is it?

[K E W L]

I dont really like this 1 6/10

and stop making new threads put all your poems in 1.

[Jarodx4]

ok from now on ill make 4 poems in 1 thred

[chimera]

not that good but 5/10

[The Zaven]

I think it actually has some potential though; use a little bit more of strong words. It's much better than all of you second threaders, that's for sure.

[muslimz]

good one 7/10 but i think you should work on one bigger :D gl