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chimera
10-25-2008, 04:37 PM
A heart is not a playing thing,
A heart is not a toy.
But if you want it broken,
just give it to a boy.

Boys they like to play with things
to see what makes them run,
but when it comes to kissing they
do it just for fun.

Boys never give their heart away,
They play us girls for fools.
They wait until we give our hearts.
And then they play it cool.

time working on this; around 17min
PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:39 PM
Uuhm .. So, Now ur talking in total?

Not true. :mad:

Sorry, Not good.
chimera
10-25-2008, 04:41 PM
Uuhm .. So, Now ur talking in total?

Not true. :mad:

Sorry, Not good.


why is it not good? cos im talking about boys? thats what happend to me ;P so its kinda true hehe
The Zaven
10-25-2008, 04:42 PM
Actually terrible literature, unchecked random capitals, and your periods and commas are all in the wrong places.

2/10
PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:44 PM
why is it not good? cos im talking about boys? thats what happend to me ;P so its kinda true hehe

It's not always the boys who are the problems in relationships. :)

& It's not that it happened to you, you need to make a poem about all boys.

You could of make it about that one boy.
chimera
10-25-2008, 04:46 PM
Actually terrible literature, unchecked random capitals, and your periods and commas are all in the wrong places.

2/10

tell me whats wrong with it and where is ''your periods and commas are all in the wrong places.''
Paolo
10-25-2008, 04:48 PM
Uh oh - Plagiarism!

http://www.shabbir.com/romance/boysgirls.html
The Zaven
10-25-2008, 04:48 PM
tell me whats wrong with it and where is ''your periods and commas are all in the wrong places.''

First, go to 4th grade, because I just told you each detail for why it was bad.
PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:50 PM
Uh oh - Plagiarism!

http://www.shabbir.com/romance/boysgirls.html

LOLOLOLOL. Owned.

You'll be banned from the forums for plagiarism. This is not tolerated. :)
kuzmin
10-25-2008, 04:51 PM
This was funny. It was weird how he came up with them second after a second.
PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:52 PM
This was funny. It was weird how he came up with them second after a second.

Indeed, Was kinda suspicious.
The Zaven
10-25-2008, 05:04 PM
This was funny. It was weird how he came up with them second after a second.

That's why I don't think we should hold tryouts for this kind of thing.
muslimz
10-25-2008, 08:04 PM
nice one :D