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muslimz
10-25-2008, 04:56 PM
Like a far away glint, I will remember you.
In the darkness, I will recognize your warmth,
And the whispers you will sing to me in the time of despair.

Within the summer,
You will come my way,
Too tear me apart.

Like a flower faiths away,
So will you disappear,
Leaving me shattered in tiny peaces.

With these last spoken words, I reveal my secret.
I will for ever hold my peace, as I draw my last breath.
For a moment of silence; I love you.

PureSkiller
10-25-2008, 04:59 PM
Nice work. Keep it up. ;]

The Zaven
10-25-2008, 05:00 PM
I like it, yet each sentence in your poem should not end in a period.

7/10

muslimz
10-25-2008, 05:32 PM
thanks for the reply