some poems

[muslimz]

first poem; A poem about love and loneliness.

She has not slept well for two years
Every night results in tears
She is shivering, freezing and crying
She feels like she is dying
She has no face
Only lonely days

Angels doesn't belong here
Goodbye...

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poem nr: 2
"Are you fond of me?"

Why reject me?
Are not I good enough?
You make me feel dirty.
I will try again,
but which is difficult to say it:
I love you!

I know how you feel about me,
but you refuse afterwards.
I don 't
Are you fond of me?
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poem nr: 3

This is a poem about how difficult it is to get a big love!

In recent days, you have often been in my thoughts,
just to hear your name makes the heart banks.
The first day I met you said it PANG,
to the fast I could believe that we had something going on,
but I never believed that you came to choose ME!
-I 'm certainly not good enough for you!
You are so kind to sweet, to utrulig good,
I of course have to hope that there would be two of us,
for you do not believe that YOU do not get me.

hope you like it.

[The Zaven]

The last one is ''OK'', the others are very bad, and you fail at attempting to spell things. Before you make poems, DICTIONARY.COM all of your words.

[Bob Dole]

Yes, needs spell checking desperately.
Plus it has a lot of grammar issues.

[kuzmin]

You have posted like 2-4 poems? I'm a bit suspicious and no I'm not jealous :d

[muslimz]

Yes, needs spellchecking desperatley.

omg.... 1- im from norway... 2- and i cant much english... -3... you should say good work...

[X Blake X]

Nice poems. :)

-Ibrairiff

[The Zaven]

omg.... 1- im from norway... 2- and i cant much english... -3... you should say good work...

1. Don't make poems for these forums if your Norwegian.

2. You just basicly said the same thing as 1.

3. I don't really understand that statement if your poems are bad, and we don't halph to give you judgement just because your ''special''.

[muslimz]

Nice poems. :)

-Ibrairiff

when i see reply like urs.. i feel im good like hell.. thanks man for ur reply!!

[Bob Dole]

when i see reply like urs.. i feel im good like hell.. thanks man for ur reply!!
We are simply giving you suggestions on how to improve your work. You should be thanking us.

[kuzmin]

1. Don't make poems for these forums if your Norwegian.

2. You just basicly said the same thing as 1.

3. I don't really understand that statement if your poems are bad, and we don't halph to give you judgement just because your ''special''.

So your saying there's no need to try?.. I see how Benz feels now..arguing with most of you.

[aharper]

i prefer long poems they sound so much better and much more description put into them

[muslimz]

i prefer long poems they sound so much better and much more description put into them

thanks im working on a big one i think it will take me 1-3 days :D

[Boylight]

Next time make a thread and put all of ur poems there.