A Cold Day In Hell

[Surfacing]

A Cold Day In Hell

I wake up in total darkness
Thinking where the hell am i
Wait i think i hear someone else
Then my whole life flashes by
Man i feel so cold,i guess no1 was told..

ITS A COLD DAY IN HELL
All i can here is the sound of a bell
Fighting to get through the crowd
Feels like im floating on a cloud
A cloud of death and torture

I dont no how much more of this crap i can take
Life feels like one big stake
I play to fight for everything
If i fail im Stuffed for internaty
Man i feel so cold,i guess no1 was told..

ITS A COLD DAY IN HELL
All i can here is the sound of a bell
Fighting to get through the crowd
Feels like im floating on a cloud
A cloud of death and torture

I kill for fun
So watch out mum
ITS A COLD DAY IN HELL!!!!

One Of My Other Songs I Have Wrote.

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[PureSkiller]

Nice poem. :)

Keep working. ^^

[Surfacing]

lol u say that on every post?

[Stealth]

Nice post, maybe give it some more meaning. It's a bit out of tune.

[Surfacing]

yeah i no. its not one of my best. i think my best one, was the one i posted not long ago.

[Italy68]

Nice work.

[Boylight]

Why u used number on one sentence? :p Try to stick with words.

Its 6/10.

[Surfacing]

well if u read it the number one (1) is in 2 lines :p and its just the way i type.

[robert307]

:mad::mad::mad::mad::mad::mad::mad::mad::mad::mad: :mad::mad::mad:uu suck dude that was just gay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11:D:D:D

[Blub Klub]

Didn't like how you left your all of your I's lowercase.

Never use numbers as 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,0 in literature. Write them out.

You had a sloppy opening that caught my attention none whatsoever.

The whole thing was a bit pointless. 3/10

You also had misspellings.

[shadow8564]

nice try :p but i have to say 7/10