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Simple Poem
10-29-2008, 06:33 PM
here goes :)

Around the corner I have a friend,
In this great city that has no end,
Yet the days go by and weeks rush on,
And before I know it, a year is gone.

And I never see my old friends face,
For life is a swift and terrible race,
He knows I like him just as well,
As in the days when I rang his bell.
And he rang mine but we were younger then,
And now we are busy, tired men.
Tired of playing a foolish game,
Tired of trying to make a name.
'Tomorrow' I say! 'I will call on Jim
Just to show that I'm thinking of him.'

But tomorrow comes and tomorrow goes,
And distance between us grows and grows.
Around the corner, yet miles away,
'Here's a telegram sir,' 'Jim died today.'
And that's what we get and deserve in the end.
Around the corner, a vanished friend.


Remember to always say what you mean.
If you love someone, tell them.
Don't be afraid to express yourself.
Reach out and tell someone what they mean to you.
Because when you decide that it is the right time it might
be too late.
Seize the day. Never have regrets.
And most importantly, stay close to your friends
and family, for they have helped
make you the person that you are today

The Zaven
10-29-2008, 06:36 PM
The rhyming ruined it all.

5/10

Simple Poem
10-29-2008, 06:37 PM
yeah well thanks for telling me :)

it is my first poem so i thought i would post it here and see what you guys/girls think

shadow8564
10-29-2008, 06:37 PM
pretty good :) nice effort

ummm but i have to give 6/10, not really deep if u know what i mean :p

Simple Poem
10-29-2008, 06:39 PM
yeah i get ya, thanks for rating

santuba123
10-29-2008, 06:42 PM
quite good (my opinion) 9/10;)

Simple Poem
10-29-2008, 06:45 PM
thankyou very much :D

9/10.... wow!

Archemedies
10-29-2008, 06:48 PM
Liked the effort. Just put some more creative vocabulary in there.

6/10

Asian
10-29-2008, 07:05 PM
http://home.att.net/~coledon/aroundthecorner.htm


kthxbai.

Simple Poem
10-29-2008, 07:08 PM
wtf? my friend lied to me :@ he sed it wasn't ripped or whatever its called

Asian
10-29-2008, 07:09 PM
wtf? my friend lied to me :@ he sed it wasn't ripped or whatever its called


Umm, so you posted it as your own even if you didn't write it.

Well, your friend didn't write it, and i'm sure you made that up and really just copied and pasted.

You sir, are an idiot.