Jealousy

[Vishaan]

Jealousy Rotts inside of me,
Ready to errupt.
My core melts down within me,
Ready To corrupt.

I look around this vast abyss,
Longing to touch your skin.
You are subsided in your bliss,
And cannot fight past his grin.

This game it overwhelms me,
Taking me by my roots.
This sudden urge will free me,
Revealing all the truths.

[playstation3]

Very nice, 9/10 :)

Has alot of meaning

[Vishaan]

Thanks. Im still working on it. Im going to add some :p

[Qrat]

make it long :]
then i can enjoy it ;]

[Webber]

Very nice, the words rhyme nicely.

Could be longer, but nice one. 8/10.

[D I N O]

8/10 Pretty Good :)