The Crowd.

[F2ks]

The Crowd

The crowd,
the roar, the wind, the painful roar.
The emotion, the atmosphere,
just being there is fair.

Each point, another calming fall,
can't grasp, can't take the fear.
A win is almost there,
the Crowd oh god they're here.

They groan, they cry,
Oh god! the might.
They wisp, they wine,
they even make there nails define.

In the end,
the roar, the emotion,
may get you through.
But oh my, they're the Crowd,
an they may help you!
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Please keep in mind this is my first poem, I tried my best. I'm looking for good advice and ways to improve the feeling, Thanks.

[liljon9090]

This is very good for your first poem,Keep up your good work.8/10.

[Zaveski]

I'm not going to add any less criticism just because it's your first, handicaps aren't my style. Also, you ranged your meaning into different synonyms meaning the same thing. So pretty much, it didn't make sence half of the time.

[F2ks]

I'm not going to add any less criticism just because it's your first, handicaps aren't my style. Also, you ranged your meaning into different synonyms meaning the same thing. So pretty much, it didn't make sence half of the time.

Thanks zaven, Never knew Literary arts were so hard.

[bluedragon]

I quite like this, 8/10.

Hope to see more from you.

[F2ks]

I quite like this, 8/10.

Hope to see more from you.

Probably not we will see, Thanks.