My Everything.

[Est1988]

I cannot live without you,
You are my morning glow,
You are my one and only star.

I think of you in times of sorrow,
And I make a maraculous recovery,
Knowing that will calm me down,
And care for me when things get tough.

You are my everything.

[Divine]

The first verse is not really deep, but the second really hit me with like a spark of love or something :].

[Wiz]

K, I wasn't going to be an ******* about this when I first read it but I seriously can't hold it back.

I have seen better writing from 6th grade English students. This is WAY over cliche (especially in these forums), not anyway descriptive, way too many "To be" verbs, and is just plain bad. But at least you tried. Next time, try to use words that have more meaning and deeper thought, reduce the clicheness of the whole "love/emo" thing going on here, and reduce the amount of "To be" verbs that you use. and if your wondering, "To be" verbs are words like we, me, are, they, etc.

[Est1988]

K, I wasn't going to be an ******* about this when I first read it but I seriously can't hold it back.

I have seen better writing from 6th grade English students. This is WAY over cliche (especially in these forums), not anyway descriptive, way too many "To be" verbs, and is just plain bad. But at least you tried. Next time, try to use words that have more meaning and deeper thought, reduce the clicheness of the whole "love/emo" thing going on here, and reduce the amount of "To be" verbs that you use. and if your wondering, "To be" verbs are words like we, me, are, they, etc.

That's fine, go ahead and say what you think.
I just cropped this up in 5-10 minutes, I can do much better.