This Kingdom of Thine

[Colin]

This Kingdom of Thine

The drive to work,
the indication of my approval.
Faces hidden by visors,
I seek their removal.

They offer their services,
I merely loathe rest.
They see I am preoccupied,
my patience be their test.

With numerous injured,
revenge I shall commence.
Once they understand,
morale shall be tense.

The contained are unconscious,
thy good news is fluttered.
Voices become melodious,
unbearing bad news has been shuddered.


Took me one hour, what do you think?

[Eneberg]

amazing masuraki! keep writing more you are truly great.
10/10

[Colin]

amazing masuraki! keep writing more you are truly great.
10/10

Literary Artist or what, lol?

[TOXiiCz]

Omg masuraki man... you should get lit any day of the week, every poem you write i love...

[Asian]

It's fairly good, but should be a lot better if you put in an hours work into this poem.

[Colin]

It's fairly good, but should be a lot better if you put in an hours work into this poem.

The whole poem did not take an hour, I was trying to double task too, took me longer than I expected.

[Divine]

Nice, sounds good, but i don't really understand it much. It's to deep=[

[Rain of Fire]

Agreeing with Nero, I don't understand it. Not saying it isn't good, for its pretty good. Just I don't understand the meaning.

If you wish be become Literary Artisit, make more and maybe describe what it means to you. Just so were not confued. Kay??

~Rain

[stride]

i dont understand alot of stuff, and if i dont, something tells my it is good, ill rate8.5/10, and im in grade 10

~stride

[Nanoblade]

Literary Artist or what, lol?

Full of yourself or what?

It's nice work but don't flaunt it with appointing yourself with a title you don't yet have.

-Luke

[Yoga]

First off just saying this couldn't be more neerdy. We are now writing poems? And second off yeah it sounds cool but in the end it has no meaning what so ever. I am not trying to be mean I am only saying write things that make sense. I am not a jerk.

[Colin]

First off just saying this couldn't be more neerdy. We are now writing poems? And second off yeah it sounds cool but in the end it has no meaning what so ever. I am not trying to be mean I am only saying write things that make sense. I am not a jerk.

It is about me as King and I am pretty much ruling over people, they are offering me services, at the same time I am wanting revenge on a long sought out enemy. I know, I should have added this as a sub-paragraph to the poem, sorry. Hope this cleans up the questions.

[RockOnDude]

Extremely beyond great Masuraki. I will have to do something about this wonderful work. :)

[unholy whip]

Very nice... Good luck on Lit artist

[Colin]

Very nice... Good luck on Lit artist


Thank you.