Unyielding time

[Colin]

Unyielding Time

The tenacious attempts,
as I fall into place.
Spinning out of control,
my life at it's base.

The vigorous unwinding,
the ticking slows down.
As slow and unchurning,
like that of a small town.

I feel the pressure,
taste of the fear.
One thing can lift this,
thy angel's tear.

The unconditional surrender,
most hopes are destroyed.
At the expenditure of lives,
every heart must feel toyed.


This poem explains how life ends and how it feels, not necessarily how you feel though.

[Eneberg]

the other one i didnt get becuase you didnt explain it. this one is great though.
10/10

[Colin]

the other one i didnt get becuase you didnt explain it. this one is great though.
10/10

I explained it in full detail on the second page of that thread, thank you.

[r4p1d sp3cz]

Colin For Literary Artist! Your Doing
Great With Your Poems 10/10 Surely!

[Asian]

Get a different type of literary work, you just post the same type of poem over and over. Almost the same length. Maybe a short story, or a different type of poem.

[Colin]

Get a different type of literary work, you just post the same type of poem over and over. Almost the same length. Maybe a short story, or a different type of poem.

I do not keep making the same poems, I keep making poems that are four paragraphs, four lines. It is the standard poem type, I have already made a short story if you would like to check that out.