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Baby Post
02-23-2009, 07:05 PM
my life (ONLY BEGGING NOT FINSHED)

my life is when people talk and cant stop
i clean my room with my broom
people hate you or like you but DONT JUST GO BOOHOO
but people hate and like you in anyway
i always go down by the bay to see the ocean
but my life always go in a motion

what about you?


well thats it hope you enjoyed it!

fireice
02-23-2009, 07:08 PM
You have different rhyme scenes so thats not good. Umm get better grammer and it just doesn't interest me right now.

Sherpa2Chris
02-23-2009, 07:11 PM
Your style of writing doesn't appeal to me. :(

Masterlop
02-23-2009, 07:15 PM
Doesn't sound very good at all. =(