Daily Night

[Star Limited]

Time for bed,
the time i dread,
at 12 o clock,
its the block.

In the night,
i turn on the light,
go downstairs,
and dream of bears.

Really Sleepy,
it gets really creepy,
turn the light off,
as i start to cough.

At the rise,
i smell pies,
Walk Down,
and find the house is brown.


Rate or hate my opinion is that this is silly :P

[h2ker]

9/10 The first part is abit Funny :D the o'clock Parts are kinda Mad :D
Keep Gowing ;d your doing Good.

Thankz for Leet :D Il update mine Soon :D

[Star Limited]

:D thanks for comments im hoping to make another few tonight :angel:

[Colin]

4/10 - Take more time! If I see another poem submission from you within the next half hour, it will be to my dismay. In order to obtain Literary Artist it is not how much work you show us, it is the value in which you present it to us. How developed your work is, is how we grade you.

[Star Limited]

OK sorry i will now make sure i make my work good.

[TOXiiCz]

I laughed out loud so hard, why the hell would the house be brown,
I think it is brown from where you shat yourself dreaming of bears!
lolroflmao

[Star Limited]

lol pl0x! toxiicz

[Max]

Not bad 8/10