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Kevin
03-25-2009, 07:25 PM
Sometimes I talk, and
The jargon of speech that flows,
Has no worth.
The ear cannot decipher the
Tasty words of green salad.
You see me standing there,
But hear no sounds.
I am but zero to your three.
And you are but loved.

Italia Mafia
03-25-2009, 07:58 PM
It's alright. Nice.

-Nick

pure lime
03-25-2009, 08:19 PM
all over the place, sorry but it is just horrible.

you go "talking" then out of no where, you get some "big word", and then a "green salad" right after it?? like Wth? i like that your trying to increase your word vocabulay, but some times you are trying to rhym a word that you might not even know the meaning to. and it just spoils a poem.

Kevin
03-25-2009, 08:36 PM
There is no rhyme scheme, it is free verse.
I know the definition to all the words I use.

Shuza
03-25-2009, 08:39 PM
It's a pretty good free verse.