Mittens

[Berkly Skilz]

Well I'm no poet I'm going to admit that right now but in my 8th grade English class we're doing poetry. Well here goes nothing.


There once was a kitten (needs to be 8 syllables)
Who went by the name Mittens,
He got in a fight,
And he made his plight,
But Mittens had been bitten.


Can't figure out what to do with the first line help would be appreciated.

I got a B because I couldn't figure out the first line but I need to rewrite it.

Constructive criticism please.

[icy hot]

Umm.... wow.
Ok what was that!
Mitten?
At least use proper grammer. Comma after every line and period at the end.
Excuse me I think I got to puke.:devil:

[Berkly Skilz]

Umm.... wow.
Ok what was that!
Mitten?
At least use proper grammer. Comma after every line and period at the end.
Excuse me I think I got to puke.:devil:

ok, that was real constructive. I need to rewrite it and I can't figure out how to make the first line 8 syllables and whatever you would like to call it still make sense, And I made a typo suppose to be Mittens.

[Persuasive]

Umm.... wow.
Ok what was that!
Mitten?
At least use proper grammer. Comma after every line and period at the end.
Excuse me I think I got to puke.:devil:

how are you going to tell someone to use proper grammar when you spelled grammar wrong, moron.

[venomic]

Well I'm no poet I'm going to admit that right now but in my 8th grade English class we're doing poetry. Well here goes nothing.


There once was a kitten (needs to be 8 syllables)
Who went by the name Mittens,
He got in a fight,
And he made his plight,
But Mittens had been bitten.


Can't figure out what to do with the first line help would be appreciated.

I got a B because I couldn't figure out the first line but I need to rewrite it.

Constructive criticism please.


Hmm, how about "There once was a sweet little kitten", just a suggestion. :)

[SeaJae]

Try: Brought to me was a kitten

Based on your idea with this, and the limited options, tough to make a more diverse suggestion, as this one is very simplistic.

To Venomic: He said it had to be 8 syllables