Shining Star.

[XX aelita XX]

You are an exquisite star.
Held high above; a beam of sun.
You're not like others, you're more bizarre.
My little star. You are one to none.

How your light can shine so bright.
How it awakens my life from fright.
Your stunning glow; for all to see,
I wish you live long; I guarantee.

A shine of your light, impressive I envison.
You make me stand up, my pillar of hope,
Please come down; it is your decision.
How your glow makes me climb an invisible rope.

How your shine is so severe.
A luminious light; held high above.
To be so far away, I drop a tear.
Because my little star, you're my one true love.

[Colin]

"You are one to none", "impressive I envision"; doesn't make sense to me.
"a shine of your light" could be be improved.
Some punctuation errors still, but nice work.

8/10 - For the overall poem.