Im Sorry

[Kreepy]

I'm sorry for not being what you wanted me to be,
So prim and proper like thee.

I'm sorry for being my own person,
But isn't that what you preached to me?


I'm me
I'm my own person


I'm NOT Sorry.

[Liam1337]

Your name says it all.

I do NOT like this sorry.Its to short.

[liljon9090]

I don't really like this,It's short and pretty simple.Not in my interest.
Work on your poetry a little bit. You have the talent.

[teh gamer]

Honestley, I think this is very short,2/10. You could have done way better.

[Kreepy]

i had a longer one typed up but i was going to add. but it said i wasnt logged in and it pissed me off cause it deleted so i said screw it and did a short one.

[Albanez]

thats to to tooo SHort mate :S 2/10..

[teh gamer]

I guess re-type it and re-post it. Then it would be longer and we can rate it. :)

[A M F]

I'm sorry for not being what you wanted me to be,
So prim and proper like thee.

I'm sorry for being my own person,
But isn't that what you preached to me?


I'm me
I'm my own person


I'm NOT Sorry.

The length of the poem and your failure at rhyming these words shows how much time you spent on this poem. Please, take your time. The poem may improve greatly if you do.

~ A M F

[briese]

The beautiful thing about poetry is that length doesn't always matter. A simple rewrite of this poem could make it decent. If haikus and limericks can be considered poetry, then this definitely can as well.

[1nvisible]

8/10 good but not the best better if you said i was gr8 =D

[Nottz]

If you want to be taken seriously as a Literary Artist/Writer, you'll have to improve your grammar outside this section and outside of your submissions. You can't just use good grammar in your submissions, being a Literary Artist means using proper grammar everywhere.

As for the poem, I like it, despite it's shortness. Some of the best poems are only two stanzas or so. I think that you could get the point across better and possibly draw it out a little more, but overall it was decent. I would've liked it more if you had stopped at the 4th line. Work on it, I can see budding talent.

7/10

[aphrodite]

Get your grammar straight if you want to be a literary artist also the lengh of the poem dosent matter. otherqise 4/10.