Apology. [15/4/09]

[Beauu]

I must apologize for loving you
With this, my deepest sincerity
I know that I'm beneath you
And your kiss, pure charity
This dream that came true
Will haunt me for eternity
This love I have no right to
I'll pay for till there's nothing left in me
The thing that will never be is I
Your short lived mistake
Soon I'll be gone again
And from this nightmare you may wake
I'm your disease, your infection
I'm so sorry for loving you
But nothing can make me stop
And because of this I must be leaving you

[Xzite]

Sounds good, 7/10. Keep improving.

[Every1die4]

Wow! Are you this person?

http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/apology-35/

You're famous aren't you? I'm starting to like your poems. They are addicting. How do you make them so fast? What inspires you to write them? Try different styles of poetry.

7.5/10.

[briese]

So you are the semi-famous Beau Bennett (http://www.poemhunter.com/beau-bennett/poems/)?

[Nottz]

"And your kiss, pure charity"

For improved rhythm, change that to,

"And your kisses are just pure charity"

Merely a suggestion.

[Beauu]

Sure am, my friend told me about this forum. I didn't know it's a Private Server, although I have played Runescape quite a bit. ;)

[Beauu]

Very nice, but I believe I have seen this poem on PoemHunter.com and I don't know if you stole it or not.

You either believe me or you don't, that is a choice you must make.
Also, please can you give me some critism, instead of just saying "nice poem".

[p4rk r4ng3r]

Your poems are great, I read it six times and each time i enjoyed it more and more, phenominal! 8/10.