Surrounded by darkness

[OwnagE1337]

My first poem , hope you enjoy, im not sure if it be good Rate/hate


Im sitting alone,
in the woods i see red eyes.

I say to me self to not panic or it will be out for me
i wish i were at my house.

I feel i need to puke,
i tell the eyes to go away.

they looks curious on me and wonder what i will do.
I making a fire to keep me warm.

i wish someone was sitting into my body, to have someone to love.
in my dreams i saw the sun rise.

i wish there wasnt darkness around me,
i start to crie,

then my father take yell after me,
i was just asleep,

i wonder if i will be able to go home.



please rate/hate, idk if i am good make, just tell me ^^

[Albanez]

I like it!! 10/10,, Keep it up buddy :D

[OwnagE1337]

lol thanks its my first poem ever, im not sure if it was good either.

i got the name from my english book :) was a text there.


but thank you albanez for a good first poems rate :]

[OwnagE1337]

2/10 for grammar, 7/10 for actual poem. Nice. Refrain from using stuff like "some1" Lol

thank you, im just forgetting it, im so used to say some1 and short worded on rs and this -.-

im srry i fixed now :)

thank you for the rate and please tell me what i spelled wrong i'll fix it.