My poem about missing that special person

[Farmer Bob]

I use to love you like God so loves us all!
You use to take my breath away everytime we toutched!
I have never wanted to be with you any more.
You were the sun light on my planet.
I miss you crazy!
I want you back in my life so you can brighten my days all over again!

By: farmer bob aka (chelsea)
please rate or hate its my 1st poem :D

[Jesse]

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[Every1die4]

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I have to agree with him on this one.

The poem doesn't flow right. It doesn't sound good. It sounds like you're just exclaiming something. :(

Anyways, try and improve.

@ Nottz - He lost me at "loves"

[Nottz]

You lost me at, "God loves."

[skykins]

nice poem man:)

[Jesse]

nice poem man:)


omg free post count bro :):(:D:o-.-:angel::yes::'(:rofl::party::love::duck::idea:;):P :rolleyes::cool::devil::yup::no::thumbsup::rabbit: :ninja::furious::???::\

[Every1die4]

nice poem man:)

Are you being honest or are you just being sarcastic? I have to rate you.

2/10. You will improve eventually.

[Ubiquitous]

On this line "I use to love you like God so loves us all! " unless you are trying to tell them to love us all you should change the wording.

"You use to take my breath away every time we touched!" Spelling...

On this line "I miss you crazy!" unless you are trying to call someone crazy it should say "I miss you like crazy!"

Those are the minute errors in my opinion, you need a lot of improvement. Good luck.

[Nanoblade]

Too many gramatical errors.

1. Spelling mistakes
2. Some lines didn't even make sense "I miss you crazy" - Sorry, but what?

-Luke

[Sherpa2Chris]

It needs some work. 75/1638

[bling bling4]

I know it's your first but the lines didn't flow well. Get some improvement . 4/10


Bling Bling

[Florida]

It needs some work. 75/1638


Nice grading scale you got.

Anyways, has no flow, bad grammer and just didn't suit well at all.
76/1639.

[Kreepy]

6/10 for some spelling. Its alright, you got a some talent. Take your time and make sure everything is fine before you post so people dont flame you.

[aphrodite]

This poem fails sorry there are many grammer errors and it makes no sense.