Death

[Responsible]

"DEATH"

You were the spirit inside of me,
Now it's time to set it free.
Why did you leave me so soon,
life was all I asked of you.
Why did yo do such wrong,
When my love was so strong.
50000 Tears I Cried,
But Will it bring you back to life?
what will I do,
When I Miss a part of you?
You did not trust me once,
Yet my trust made me feel like such a dunce?
I can't bring you back home,
Now I've reaped what I have sown.
though it wasn't your turn,
I have to put you in an urn?
Well, You've had your last parade,
and you've seen the parties fade.
Why should I be sad,
When I've done nothing bad.
How is it fair,
When you know I'll always care,
Just to see you once more,
Would it put you back on the floor?
Would you dance the night away?
Like you did on your last night?
Is this my torture for trusting you,
My hurt for what you could do?
Talk to me once more again,
I might understand it then.
Why can't i turn back time?
To keep myself from committing this crime?
If I could be redeemed,
I would not be who i seem,
But what have i done?
What have i said?
To deserve not to see you again?
I've done nothing wrong,
Which is why I've song this pity song...

[Kreepy]

I REALLY like this one but im going to have to give you a 9.5/10 for "Would you dance the night away?
Like you did on your last night?" Switch it around somehow it doesn't really go with the whole poem. However this is one of my favs i've read in a while. Good Job.

[Cariz]

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