Numbers

[The Jigsaw]

:devil: Wile looking throught the key hole of death :devil:
:devil: Watching one struggle :devil:
:devil: Holding on for deer life :devil:
:devil: Tears and sweat falls from ones face :devil:
:devil: Screaming and shouting :devil:
:devil: Watching, Observing :devil:
:devil: The cliff hanging excitment :devil:
:devil: Wile one slips away :devil:
:devil: One thinks **** it :devil:
:devil: watching Ones grip release :devil:
:devil: And slowly slip :devil:

:devil: One becomes none, :devil:

:devil: You are all numbers, :devil:
:devil: And when your numbers up, :devil:
:devil: Dont give up :devil:

[Moist]

what are you trying to achive??

[briese]

I can't believe I'm saying this...

It's not bad. Fix some of the grammar / spelling and get rid of all the devils. Character-wise, I'm not a big fan of you thus far, but a slightly interesting read none-the-less.

[Kreepy]

I really like this one. 9/10 for grammar as birese said. You have some talent. Keep it up.