Ubiquitous
04-25-2009, 12:37 AM
Off topic - First off, if something is not capitalized where it should be please tell me. When I pasted this everything became lower case.
On topic - Time, why? I think the plot should become clearer. And you do not know how long it took to think of a name for Jill.
"Bye Mr. Grow, and what conversation?" I showed him to the door and sat down to think. Why would Mr. Grow care? Where had he been standing? I thought i was the only person in the parking lot. Why is no one supposed to know? I have a lot of questions, but no answers. I need to find all of this out. A car door slammed shut, and my dad walked in. He looked stressed, and I didn't want to bother him.
"Hey dad." I said as he entered the kitchen. I checked the clock it was 9:47.
"Jake, where is your mother?" i started to get nervous. He didn't say hello to me, and asking where mom is? Another car door slammed shut. The front door opened and in walked mom.
"Hey Jake, hey Hun." she said as she dropped the bags she was holding.
"Jake go to sleep." That wasn't like my dad to issue me to sleep.
"Okay dad, g' night." I started walking up the stairs, I now had more questions and no answers. It was turning out to be a great week. I started to get undressed when my parents started arguing. I got in to the shower, finally I couldn't hear them anymore. I started thinking, and stayed in the shower until the water got cold. As i got out i checked my clock, it was 1:24. My parents had stopped fighting, and gone to sleep. I went to sleep, and had nightmares the entire night. When i woke up it was 6:11. I didn't have to wake up for another hour and nineteen minutes. I took another shower, and only wasted 30 minutes. I got dressed, and was pout of the house at 6:57. I went to IHOP and got pancakes. I began to think some more, but i got no where. I checked the clock it was 7:14. I started to head towards school, but instead i went to the mall. I got there at 7:37 and had to wait 23 until they opened. I went in and started looking at clothes. I checked my watch and it was 11. I got something to eat, and went to school. I got to school at 12, and made it for lunch. I barely got through my classes until mythology.
"Gor the next month we will be working on vampires." Mr. Sang says with a smile. I payed close attention to see how he treated rose and Jo Jo. He didn't look at them normally, as did they to him. Mr. Sang discussed how there were three different types of vampires.
"The three types of vampire are the sānge de prad?, emotiv pradātor and elementar de prad?. We will focus on each type for one week, and then you will have one week for a project. Today we will begin with the sānge de prad?. The sānge de prad? In English means blood predator. They are the vampry you always hear about. Vampry is the name for a specific type of vampire, and vampire is the name for either of the prad?. The blood vampry can be killed by a bullet, or any other weapon. They will not die if they go in to sunlight, but they acquire sunburns within a minute or two. They feed from blood, they require around 10 pints a week to live. The average will live up to 2,500 years, though some are 10,000. Blood vampry will not die unless wounded. They have super speed, strength, and healing abilities." he gave us the basics, and said we would go in to specifics over the next 4 days. When the bell rang I got out as fast as i could. While i was walking out of the class i bumped in to someone.
"Oh sorry." I said picking up my books. I looked up to see who I bumped in to. I had bumped in to a girl, about 5 feet 4 inches. Blond, sapphire eyes, naturally tan and good looking.
"I am sorry. I'm very uncoordinated." she started apologizing
"Hey I'm Jake, sorry about this, what is your name?" I said as I picked up her books.
"Hi I'm Jill. Hi Jake, i am really sorry."
On topic - Time, why? I think the plot should become clearer. And you do not know how long it took to think of a name for Jill.
"Bye Mr. Grow, and what conversation?" I showed him to the door and sat down to think. Why would Mr. Grow care? Where had he been standing? I thought i was the only person in the parking lot. Why is no one supposed to know? I have a lot of questions, but no answers. I need to find all of this out. A car door slammed shut, and my dad walked in. He looked stressed, and I didn't want to bother him.
"Hey dad." I said as he entered the kitchen. I checked the clock it was 9:47.
"Jake, where is your mother?" i started to get nervous. He didn't say hello to me, and asking where mom is? Another car door slammed shut. The front door opened and in walked mom.
"Hey Jake, hey Hun." she said as she dropped the bags she was holding.
"Jake go to sleep." That wasn't like my dad to issue me to sleep.
"Okay dad, g' night." I started walking up the stairs, I now had more questions and no answers. It was turning out to be a great week. I started to get undressed when my parents started arguing. I got in to the shower, finally I couldn't hear them anymore. I started thinking, and stayed in the shower until the water got cold. As i got out i checked my clock, it was 1:24. My parents had stopped fighting, and gone to sleep. I went to sleep, and had nightmares the entire night. When i woke up it was 6:11. I didn't have to wake up for another hour and nineteen minutes. I took another shower, and only wasted 30 minutes. I got dressed, and was pout of the house at 6:57. I went to IHOP and got pancakes. I began to think some more, but i got no where. I checked the clock it was 7:14. I started to head towards school, but instead i went to the mall. I got there at 7:37 and had to wait 23 until they opened. I went in and started looking at clothes. I checked my watch and it was 11. I got something to eat, and went to school. I got to school at 12, and made it for lunch. I barely got through my classes until mythology.
"Gor the next month we will be working on vampires." Mr. Sang says with a smile. I payed close attention to see how he treated rose and Jo Jo. He didn't look at them normally, as did they to him. Mr. Sang discussed how there were three different types of vampires.
"The three types of vampire are the sānge de prad?, emotiv pradātor and elementar de prad?. We will focus on each type for one week, and then you will have one week for a project. Today we will begin with the sānge de prad?. The sānge de prad? In English means blood predator. They are the vampry you always hear about. Vampry is the name for a specific type of vampire, and vampire is the name for either of the prad?. The blood vampry can be killed by a bullet, or any other weapon. They will not die if they go in to sunlight, but they acquire sunburns within a minute or two. They feed from blood, they require around 10 pints a week to live. The average will live up to 2,500 years, though some are 10,000. Blood vampry will not die unless wounded. They have super speed, strength, and healing abilities." he gave us the basics, and said we would go in to specifics over the next 4 days. When the bell rang I got out as fast as i could. While i was walking out of the class i bumped in to someone.
"Oh sorry." I said picking up my books. I looked up to see who I bumped in to. I had bumped in to a girl, about 5 feet 4 inches. Blond, sapphire eyes, naturally tan and good looking.
"I am sorry. I'm very uncoordinated." she started apologizing
"Hey I'm Jake, sorry about this, what is your name?" I said as I picked up her books.
"Hi I'm Jill. Hi Jake, i am really sorry."