Unsocial

[Johno]

Hushed, thus far waiting intended for the moment,
Surreptitiously ignoring all others,
Introvert, another way unsocial.

Ignoring, resembling there’s no one close by,
Dissimilar, nevertheless depressing,
Resilient to any chatter.

No companionship,
Silence, Ignorant and completely unsocial,
No meaning to friends, nor chatter.
Unsocial.

My first poem, Hope you enjoyed it.

[top4skiller]

not bad

8/10 :p

top4skiller

[Nanoblade]

Alot of 'big' words that I'm not sure you understand seem to be thrown about in the poem with no sense of structure.

Always make sure you proof read, preferably say it out loud and see if it makes sense. If you look through it you'll find many errors.

-Luke

[Johno]

Alot of 'big' words that I'm not sure you understand seem to be thrown about in the poem with no sense of structure.

Always make sure you proof read, preferably say it out loud and see if it makes sense. If you look through it you'll find many errors.

-Luke

Thanks for the Cnc, But I do understand these words, and I read it out many times.

[Respected]

Nice vocabulary, but I don't like it, 5/10.

[Nottz]

I'm surprised no one likes this poem. I loved it. Unlike the rest of the idiots on this site you know how to put rhythm into a free verse poem! It's like a godsend. Your vocabulary added to the rhythm and gave it your own unique flavor, and the easily remembered refrain "unsocial" somewhat helped us define words like "introvert" and "dissimilar." Bravo, my friend. You've earnmed a gold star from Nottz.

9/10

[Johno]

I'm surprised no one likes this poem. I loved it. Unlike the rest of the idiots on this site you know how to put rhythm into a free verse poem! It's like a godsend. Your vocabulary added to the rhythm and gave it your own unique flavor, and the easily remembered refrain "unsocial" somewhat helped us define words like "introvert" and "dissimilar." Bravo, my friend. You've earnmed a gold star from Nottz.

9/10

Thank you, Means quite a lot.

[Asian]

Don't get me wrong, it's a good poem. The only thing I suggest is stick away from the thesaurus. Sometime's it doesn't fit with the structure, not so much in this poem but in a lot of your other ones.

[Johno]

Don't get me wrong, it's a good poem. The only thing I suggest is stick away from the thesaurus. Sometime's it doesn't fit with the structure, not so much in this poem but in a lot of your other ones.

I try to stay away from it, I'll see if I can fade away from it.

[Kreepy]

I like your style in work. I also liked this poem. I can't see why people said they didn't. You get my approval. =]

[Johno]

I like your style in work. I also liked this poem. I can't see why people said they didn't. You get my approval. =]

Thanks, This is probably one of my bests.

[Kreepy]

Agreed and I enjoyed. I'm going to make an 1337 list. If you continue to make great poems like this, your name is on it easy. Keep up your good work.

-Kreepy

[Johno]

Agreed and I enjoyed. I'm going to make an 1337 list. If you continue to make great poems like this, your name is on it easy. Keep up your good work.

-Kreepy

Thanks, Kreepy.