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XX aelita XX
05-04-2009, 02:16 PM
My Waddle World entry. I thought I would share it with you all :)
http://i40.tinypic.com/1z35gt3.png
strftw123
05-04-2009, 02:21 PM
Looks Cool. Try Sharpening it up a bit in PS. Just a suggestion
Nottz
05-05-2009, 01:08 AM
We be a whole? Are you a bloody pirate? Lol.
XX aelita XX
05-05-2009, 09:30 AM
We be a whole? Are you a bloody pirate? Lol.
No lol it means we join together as one. Just in different words.
briese
05-06-2009, 05:23 AM
I also don't like the 'we be a whole' line. It'd sound better as 'we are whole'.

I think the poem would flow better if you stuck to one rhyming scheme; you switched in each stanza. The first scheme (AABB) seemed to fit. Other than that I liked the flow of a few of the stanzas seperately, but as a whole it was a little jumbled up.