Luck !

[santuba123]

When i was little,
i asked my mother,
what is luck and
where can i find it?

She said to me:
you know, luck is
when you have a
friend, who you can
trust and love.

Don't find luck,
If you deserve it,
it will find you.

And then i waited,
i had to wait for
a long time.

I imagined you,
you were tall
and had dark hair.

That was supposed
to be ideal.
But then came you...

You were different,
than i had thought,
but you were better,
as i was hoped.
With you came
Luck.

~~san~~

[ynnaD]

Was this meant to be a poem? Because it doesn't look like one. You just separated sentences into stanzas.

Next time try reading what's a poem and how do you make one. You will need to be creative and make each stanza rhyme.

[top4skiller]

korupe!

poems dont always have to rhyme.
they can be nice also without it.

top4skiller

Ps. I like this one!

[santuba123]

Was this meant to be a poem? Because it doesn't look like one. You just separated sentences into stanzas.

Next time try reading what's a poem and how do you make one. You will need to be creative and make each stanza rhyme.
i agree with top4skiller and that was my point of way in doing it.
thanks top4

[Nottz]

Didn't say it had to rhyme. He said it doesn't look like a poem, and I agree. It's a ****ty excuse for a poen. You wrote some sentences down, and divided them to pretend to be a poem. Don't go pretending you know everythjing when there are plenty of experienced people here already.

Try harder, if free verse isn't your thing, try and make a rhyming poem until you get better. This one is terrible, and as nice as I'd like to be, you guys made me mad by being pals and not taking Korupe's criticism to heart. Try again, sorry about my ****head attitude.

[Boylight]

Didn't say it had to rhyme. He said it doesn't look like a poem, and I agree. It's a ****ty excuse for a poen. You wrote some sentences down, and divided them to pretend to be a poem. Don't go pretending you know everythjing when there are plenty of experienced people here already.

Try harder, if free verse isn't your thing, try and make a rhyming poem until you get better. This one is terrible, and as nice as I'd like to be, you guys made me mad by being pals and not taking Korupe's criticism to heart. Try again, sorry about my ****head attitude.

Its only the internet.

[santuba123]

Didn't say it had to rhyme. He said it doesn't look like a poem, and I agree. It's a ****ty excuse for a poen. You wrote some sentences down, and divided them to pretend to be a poem. Don't go pretending you know everythjing when there are plenty of experienced people here already.

Try harder, if free verse isn't your thing, try and make a rhyming poem until you get better. This one is terrible, and as nice as I'd like to be, you guys made me mad by being pals and not taking Korupe's criticism to heart. Try again, sorry about my ****head attitude.
i'm not going for a literary artist u goof, omg and wut if it doesn't rhyme, so what??wtf is your problem????

[XX aelita XX]

i'm not going for a literary artist u goof, omg and wut if it doesn't rhyme, so what??wtf is your problem????
He doesn't care if your going for lit artist or not. What he is saying is, YOU SUCK AT POETRY, AND YOU CAN'T WRITE PROPER POETRY.

[Balance]

Try and write in stanzas with 4 four lines and don't make it to long, i shall get into poetry once more and start posting some work.

~Balance

[Colin]

It is just a story reorganized into a poem format. Very small range of vocabulary used, expand on it.

[Ubiquitous]

He doesn't care if your going for lit artist or not. What he is saying is, YOU SUCK AT POETRY, AND YOU CAN'T WRITE PROPER POETRY.

Truth be told, neither can you.