My Spicy Curry

[P403]

My Spicy Curry
Made me get water in a hurry.
Although milk is great.
I guess its too late.

It is one spicy food.
Too bad it can't get sued.
My tongue is burning,
And is urning
For milk.


Its my first one so It might not be that good.

~Aaron~

[Sherpa]

That's quite an original topic for a poem. That's the only thing I wish to say about this.

[Iplayer]

Its a haha poem nothing serious very light harted :p

[f4ll3n d0wn]

it wasn't that amazing but it was your 1st.. The rhyme scheme was really crappy and it wasnt a really good topic but still nice effort 5/10:P

[f4ll3n d0wn]

Its a haha poem nothing serious very light harted :p
It is hearted lol

[XX aelita XX]

Try to make your poems with at least four stanzas. Also, I can see you have created a little flow. Expand your vocabulary and stay on topic. Don't switch from subject to subject. 4/10.

[Nottz]

It was humourous and decently written until the end. Work on the ending, and it would be quite the children's poem.