My poem

[wampis ltu]

You don't love me anymore - and hard to smell the gardens
And the dramatic drops on the fields of Birds
You don't love me anymore... And the lake, the same
Shine, cold rolls through the sand.

You don't love me anymore, and developing my eyes,
Only you stealthily passing touched
And today, the soul still echoes in your steps
Through the night, through fog and rain

Are you don't love me anymore - and we like scare
Of this stillness, which is in our bleak,
Only way I can not find a single word,
To tell you the wind is restless.

The changing picture of the filaments surprising.
Their dreams reflect the dimensions of warm...
Did not you just send the following words,
You do not love me anymore. You - the love of wind...

It's your mind, and your words are shaking,
It's moving with you -
It's lips and face of dissolved -
And not to separate me, where are you, where - the wind...

You don't love me anymore. - And anyway what a pity,
That the wind can not die, and love.
And gave him everything - and the passion and love,
And this song just for them - the most beautiful of my hope...

Comment: Sorry for my worse english, it's because im lithuanian. Enjoy it...

[XX aelita XX]

People need to learn the difference between submissions and works in progress. Anyways. Your poem is horrible. Sorry, you've got no flow. Alot of grammatical errors. Take time on your poems and think them through. 4/10.

[C o l i n]

Before you submit your next poem read it over to yourself. Like Aelita stated, there was absolutely no flow or rhythem established, ever. Work on correcting and improving your grammar, read a book if need be, it will help.