Should I make more?

[mentality]

Judging by the poem I submitted called "Remembrance" , should I create and submit more poems? If you think that I shouldn't yet, please give me some feedback on what I can improve on. Thanks :)

-Nick

[briese]

I'd like it a lot better if everyone posted more submissions - even if they're God awful, they are still interesting to read.

You in particular need to read your poem aloud before finalizing it. Make sure that if you're following a certain rhyming scheme (like you were in 'Rememberance') then you don't have to pronounce a word in a certain way in order for it all to fit. I'd be very interested to see you write with a different premise (preferably a bit more optimistic). I'm also not a huge fan of the name of the poem, but that's an extremely minute detail that doesn't really matter.

[mentality]

Thank you very much for the feedback. :D