Don't Stop

[Marisa]

Rapidly, my heart slams against my chest,
As your hands explore my body.
Touching me as if you're putting me to memory.
Never forgetting any soft spot, any crease.

Sharply, air moves in and out of my lungs.
Do you know the power you have over me?
The increase of oxygen makes my head spin.
No matter how many times I revolve, I'm lead back to you.

Softly, your lips trace patterns on my skin.
An overwhelming feeling with intent to pull me under.
My nerves are tingling, my soul is singing.
I may be losing my grip, but whatever you do, don't stop.

[Mutilate]

I like it alot, 8/10

Very nice, I love the vivid descriptions, but add some more flow. Read it out loud.

[Kreepy]

Holy **** Marisa. I was into that all the way (hard to do btw). I ****ing loved it. 10/10.

[Marisa]

Yeah, I wrote this last night while I had headphones in my ears so that messed things up a little bit probably.

[Kreepy]

The flow was only a little off but I don't care. That was awsome.

[Marisa]

Holy **** Marisa. I was into that all the way (hard to do btw). I ****ing loved it. 10/10.

Glad you liked it, Kreepy. :)

[NinjaCat]

I enjoyed that poem Marisa, great job 9/10 ;)

[The Artist]

I really liked that poem Marisa.
Great flow and it was sort of addicting to read.

[Marisa]

Wow, I don't think anyone's ever called my writing addicting before. Thanks for the comments. :)