Eclipse.

[XX aelita XX]

Sunshine sparkles a howling light,
Moonlight glows in the fearful night,
The sun glimmers and the moon astounds,
The light shines brighter, an eclipse I doubt.

The room turns ice and the world is flame,
All forces around suddenly feel tame,
Light and dark come together, a compound,
The sky is still while the lights fade within.

Twilight, dawn all come together,
The light shines over, lighter than a feather,
Even though it may blind your sight,
The eclipse must ignite.

This wondrous light is rare to see,
Some fear it greatly we pray it to flee,
And when the light and the dark are unconnected,
The sun comes out and we are protected.

[briese]

A Stephanie Meyer theme - cute. You used "Twilight", "Moon", "Eclipse", and "Dawn".

The rhyming scheme is flawed, and you could've put at least a little effort into matching syllables in the scheme (ex: end of the 3rd stanza). I also find the line "Some fear it greatly we pray it to flee" annoying. It's grammatically incorrect, even for a sentence, and it just seems like you were trying to fit the rhyme. A good premise, but it needs work.

[The Risen]

Light and dark come together, a compound,
The sky is still while the lights fade within.


That one I didn't get.The others are a 10\10.So that is a 9\10 overall score for my opinion.

[Kreepy]

It did seem that you tried to rhyme too hard. Overall I enjoyed it. I liked the idea for it. 7/10

[XX aelita XX]

Well lol, I wasn't really doing a Stephanie Meyer theme, I kind of was thinking of Michael Jacksons 'Blame it on the Boogie'

Sunshine
Moonlight
Good times
Boogie.

And the other words just came.