Lyrics

[Kreepy]

I listened to Feel like dying by Lil' Wayne. I got some lyrics in my head as the song played on. Here they are.

For what I am about to explain to you,
Is the day and life of what I live through,
All my struggles, pains and what I do.
I feel like dying.

With the flamers in my life,
always ending in a strife,
making me glance down at my knife.
I feel like dying.

As my family members slowly fade,
depression started and slowly stayed,
my heart sang and heavily weighed.
I feel like dying.

From this world to the next,
Changing could be done with so many objects,
I feel like dying.

As you read this text,
Be known I won’t rest.
I feel like dying.

To carry on to the next day,
I won’t let my feelings display.
I feel like dying.

I feel like dying.
I feel like dying.


Note: I did kinda take the "Feel like dying" part. :D

[Brains]

From this world to the next,
Changing could be done with so many objects,


That part really doesn't flow, but other than that, nice lyrics/poem/song w/e it is lol.

[Mutilate]

very nice. I like it alot. Brains was right though, the part in the middle (more towards the end) did lack a little flow. nice poem, because thats all that a song is. A poem set to a smexy beat

[Kreepy]

I had a beat in my head. I'm guessing you guys didn't feel it :D

[Johno]

Brains and Nobartholem it sounds fine if you have the beat and tune of the song, anyway, Taylor It's really good and I enjoyed singing it, extend it and keep going :P.

[Kreepy]

Thanks Sound. I'm glad someone felt the beat.

[Fancy Pants]

Very Nice Kreepy
:D:D:D:D

[Kreepy]

Thanks fancy.

[RockOnDude]

It's good but i find it a bit choppy :(

[Vishaan]

I had a beat in my head. I'm guessing you guys didn't feel it :D

Welcome to my world. I'm almost done posting things here simply because no one actually critique's my writing. No one ever spends time to mull over it.

I like it, I think I have the same beat as you. I just feel like the "I feel like dying" part should be a little longer? It still fits good, at least for the beat I chose.

[Mutilate]

Kreepy if you have a beat, write some music, im a drummer. If you can find a program to write some music, then I can record it for you.

[Kreepy]

I play guitar :D

[Mutilate]

Online band! Just find a program that teaches you how to write in the percussion cleft. I can record it for you

[I Liek Poemz]

I had a beat in my head. I'm guessing you guys didn't feel it :D

Is the beat supposed to be kinda like Ob-o-ject to ryhme with next?