Dramatization Within Stories

[Colin]

Stories on Dodian suck, touch it up with simple dramatization grammar. If there is another story posted by a Literary Artist without this, I quit. From the reader's point of view a story which is dramatized is one where he witnesses the actions and dialogue of the characters for himself, as opposed to hearing a narrator 'telling a story'. For example do not write:

Tyler told his wife Kaleigh that he would be late home from the office that evening, then left for work before she had time to ask him why.

Instead write:

"I'll be a bit late home tonight Kaleigh," said Tyler, picking up his briefcase and opening the front door.

From the writer's point of view it means refrain from putting yourself in the position of a reporter who passes on information to the reader. If you don't read this and understand it, I can not help you.

[Mutilate]

I agree with you 100% colin. Writers should use dialogue regularly and also be descriptive. Also, when you do not use dialogue, it sounds as if your gossiping.

I told him that I would be late from work, and then she said that I was....

Its gets very annoying and repetative, which is one of the reasons I tend to enjoy poetry. I can't focus long enough on the one problem to make the story descriptive and interesting enough

[Mugshot]

You won't quit, i guarentee you.
oh yeah and.. I see where you're coming from but it really doesn't make alot of different.

[Mutilate]

I know you mean DIFFERENCE not different. But colin, you won't quit

[2p c]

Not everybody has perfect grammar.If your going to quit over a childish reason so be it.

[Nottz]

I've been telling people to do this (Kreepy) for a while now.

[R u n a r]

i agree with you Colin.
But You can just ƒuçkıng †ry †o q•u•i•t :•)

[briese]

Not everybody has perfect grammar.If your going to quit over a childish reason so be it.

No, not everybody has perfect grammar, but if you want to be taken seriously in this section then you may want to give it your best shot.

[Mutilate]

I've been trying as hard as I can, and I think I'm doing a good job.

For example, I proof read my posts.

[Colin]

I was being sarcastic when saying "I quit if another story shows up without this", it's called dramatic irony trying to give it a little more emotion. That's just what I expect.

[Nanoblade]

You said the story I posted was almost flawless (or something to that degree). I've reposted it under the name "Perfection" and that has no speech in it.

[Vishaan]

Meh.

I really want to write a story, but it comes down to pure laziness.

[Colin]

You said the story I posted was almost flawless (or something to that degree). I've reposted it under the name "Perfection" and that has no speech in it.

Your ***** was bigger back then.

[Nanoblade]

Your ***** was bigger back then.

It's bigger now. So suck it and read it again.