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Vishaan
07-20-2009, 10:21 PM
Look through this skin,
Into my heart,
Through my bones,
Within a fresh start.

Look deep inside,
This deep blue haze,
This fresh new trap,
An unwoven maze.

The clock ticks one,
The hour counts down,
This night can't end,
For my heart will drown.

Drink in the moment,
Let it last for the night,
For this moment will end,
In one shattering sight.

Kreepy
07-21-2009, 11:50 AM
Amazing flow man :D I suggest revising the last stanza. Just doesn't seem to fit that well.

Vishaan
07-21-2009, 11:51 AM
Amazing flow man :D I suggest revising the last stanza. Just doesn't seem to fit that well.

thanks [= I tried to use that as a little way to end the poem. :p