It's Funny Sometimes - Nottz

[Nottz]

It's funny sometimes,
How the young people die,
How the happiest thoughts,
Can still make you cry.
How the birth of a child,
Can balance the earth,
And the death of a loved one,
Will always bring hurt.
How the well still runs dry,
In the heaviest rains,
How love, while so sweet,
Brings uncomparable pain.
How all people dance,
And all people die,
How in life, they are seperate,
But in death, they all cry.
How someone so loved,
Can feel most alone,
And how when death comes for one,
One's true colors are shown.
Life's all a comedy,
I laugh so hard, it's a crime,
And yet, it's all pointless,
Life is funny sometimes.

[Kreepy]

Wow you do have a point :D The flow was amazing. Made me smile :D

[Nottz]

Wow you do have a point :D The flow was amazing. Made me smile :D

Glad it made you smile. The irony is, this poem actually depresses me. The laugh so hard it's a crime part is sarcastic you know.

[Kreepy]

Hmmm. I understand. I don't know why I smiled. Possibly cause I enjoy dark things or it could be that I'm Kreepy.

[briese]

Depressing, but I very much enjoyed it. Great poem; just what I'd expect from you Nottz. If there is one thing I could change about it, though...

And how when death comes for one,
One's true colors are shown.

Something about that just irks me. It may be the back-to-back 'one's.

[Mutilate]

Loved the poem, so true,

But this line threw flow off just a tad, I had to read that line about three times before I got the rhythm

And how when death comes for one,

[Nottz]

Depressing, but I very much enjoyed it. Great poem; just what I'd expect from you Nottz. If there is one thing I could change about it, though...

And how when death comes for one,
One's true colors are shown.

Something about that just irks me. It may be the back-to-back 'one's.

The back to back 'one's are on purpose.

Loved the poem, so true,

But this line threw flow off just a tad, I had to read that line about three times before I got the rhythm

I can see where you'd struggle with that, I'll try to make my rhythm more easily noticable in the future.

[Amazingly]

The irony of life is funny..
For one to come into this world, one must pass away.

[0h d 3 a r]

That was very good.
10/10.